Tuesday, October 16, 2007

Young Woman in Black

Her hair is dark
she paints her face
dresses in black velvet and lace
is a mystery to herself.

At weekends
she hands out poetry books
to skater boys
in the park.

‘Let me be your Muse’
she says.


PaulS said...

An intriguing and carefully crafted character study. Opens out in the last line like an echo.

lettuce said...


i will show this to my goth daughter (13) she'll love it.

and want to be her!

Poetman said...

ah the terror of beauty...
or, what would a boisterous boy
do if he had a clue..? or what would a muse do if she had a voice without a boy...? or....


Crafty Green Poet said...

PaulS - thanks!
Lettuce - hope your daughter enjoys!+
Poetman - intriguing speculations!

Jo said...

Love the ending!

Mariacristina said...

This is terrific. She's a sweet character I could see showing up in many different poetic scenarios.

UL said...

I would love to collect the hand-out. Be my muse, more than welcome, I loved the way you used short lines... thank you.


Rob Kistner said...

I see an alluring young woman,
whose thoughts would both shock and captivate...