Sunday, April 01, 2007

Deepest Darkest

He had the blackest hair, the darkest
eyes staring from thin paleness.
Deep she thought - New Wave
French cinema; discussing Proust
over cappuccino.

She wasn't prepared for the nightmares

traumatised sleep, waking
eyes dark-ringed. She tried
leaving but was in too deep
dark-placed. Finally he left her
to grief unsolaced.

Deepest Darkest for Sunday Scribblings

20 comments:

colleen said...

My husband's hair was so black that it reflected rainbows in the sun, but now it's gone mostly grey. It still loops in curls like fingers saying, "come here."

ish said...

'...in too deep
dark-placed' Superb phrase. Why are we so frequently seduced by that which would destroy us?

UnfoldingRose said...

this caught me right from the opening line!

Beaman said...

Enjoyable read. Definitely deep and dark. Good writing.

paris parfait said...

Lots of darkness in that relationship - well told!

Regina Clare Jane said...

Oh, very mysterious...

Brian said...

Dark hair, to dark nightmares. I wonder at all the lines you left unwritten.

Patois said...

You could easily have written that about a man from my long-ago past. Marvelous.

Tammy said...

Seduced by what we see can be deceiving. Well done!

spacedlaw said...

Seductive. Makes you wonder what brought on the nightmares.

Jemima said...

"Deep she thought"

I love the commentary in this.

Remiman said...

Juliet,
The open heart so easily bruised, but the exquisit joy sacrificed if too cautious.
rel

TI said...

I love the different riffs on deep and dark through this poem/story.

gautami tripathy said...

I like the repetitive useof deep here. It somehow enhances the darkness of it...


gautami
Stranger in the Mirror

Deb G said...

This is good...I really like "dark-placed."

KG said...

So well written about how looks --- and the dreams we associate with them --- can be deceiving. But people need to learn this in their own ways...

sarala said...

Shivery good.

chiefbiscuit said...

The dangerous relationship - maybe we all have had that experience ... I can relate anyway. Well-said, well-written.

daisies said...

beautiful ~ this brings up memories of a diffrent time, years and years ago ...

Bohemian Mom said...

Fabulous writing.
Deep and dark indeed.
Love it.