Wednesday, August 08, 2007

Alpine

I self-consciously pocketed
the image of cowbells
as a text-book ‘poetic moment’
to add authentic colour.

Now, looking back
I dwell on the disintegration
of our friendship
that began that day.

And the endless melancholy of cowbells.

18 comments:

polona said...

oh this is good!
i suppose most of us have an object or sound (or other sensory stimulus) that bear a special meaning...

Carole said...

Image, thought and feeling beautifully encapsulated.

gautami tripathy said...

sound of cowbells....reverbates.

odessa said...

the endless melancholy of cowbells. wow. i love this line!

Remiman said...

Juliet,
A beautiful verse to remind us of how anchored to nature are our emotions.
rel

welcome to my universe said...

Cowbells are so melancholy - great ending!

Brian said...

Brilliant use of sound to capture an emotional state.

sister AE said...

nicely done. the more "feeling" part drapes well across the concrete frame you set up with the shape and sound of the bells.

Constance said...

A very thoughtful poem. Nice!

paisley said...

a visual reminder of a memory can be a powerful thing...

Paul Decelles said...

So much in these 8 lines. Great!

_Soulless_ said...

You've blown me away with this short, noticeably inspired piece. ^_^ I applaud. Cheers.

tumblewords said...

pocketed the image of cowbells - my favorite line. The depth of the poem with a little surprise, a staying sadness and a lovely use of words is indeed inspired!

paris parfait said...

Very concise, with lots of meaning packed into a short piece. Well done!

M Pritchard said...

Ah yes. I used to paint. For the last 5 months I can't paint or even look at any art supplies without thinking of betrayal. Strange but true.

...deb said...

Mmmm. There's so much I like about this, but most of all how the cowbells echo my own (your reader) instances of regret. Fine poem.

gel said...

That first stanza is a grabber- well done!
and carries through the entire piece.

Roberta said...

thank you for almost getting me to stop associating cowbells with Christopher Walken and Will Ferrell doing the SNL "more cowbell" skit...