Monday, September 04, 2006

Haiku - solitude

This week's prompt on One Deep Breath is Solitude. This is my haiku:

snow in the churchyard
behind a wrought iron gate –
woman in black.

14 comments:

paris parfait said...

Your haiku suggests so many different meanings - of sadness; mourning and yes, solitude and isolation. Very well done!

Jennifer said...

this is so good too. I love the stark contrasts.

jblack designs said...

Beautiful. I love this, evocative and unexpected.

Mike Mc said...

So much unstated, and unstated so well. I like it.

bgfay said...

There's a great contrast there, the black on white, the sudden appearance of the woman in nature, and more. I like the image that it conjures for me and I can almost feel snow starting to fall outside my window even though it's only September.

Tammy said...

The beauty of impermanance is here. Excellent job!

ian russell said...

gothic. i can imagine the tolling of a single bell. wonderful haiku.

Sandy said...

wow! does this create a mood!

beccabee2005 said...

Definitely a sharp contrast to your other haiku, setting a tone of desolation in the solitude. Well done!

Clare said...

I like the contrast of black and white, as well the coldness running through - of iron, of snow, of mourning.

Endment said...

Starkly alone -

jillypoet said...

This is what haiku is supposed to do...create a snapshot, catch a moment just like that. Love it!

Crafty Green Poet said...

Thanks for all your comments everyone!

AnnieElf said...

If words can evoke color than yours have truly evoked an image of black and white.