Time kaleidoscopes the moment asserts itself like a red dress against snow.
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Oh, this would be a great poem for a real time discussion group! I like the phrase time kaleidoscopes and the last stanza is certainly strong and cinches the point.
You know I think of WCW Red Wheelbarrow, can't help it. But then I think of that poem from the humor issue of Poetry Magazine, that is something like "so much depends upon on a white cadillac grazed with rainwater, beside the white chicks." or something of that ilk...it's good.
Love the image of the red dress against the snow. And can I just say that I cracked up reading about the "white cadillac grazed with rainwater beside the white chicks." Gotta get my hands on that issue.
6 comments:
Oh, this would be a great poem for a real time discussion group! I like the phrase time kaleidoscopes
and the last stanza is certainly strong and cinches the point.
You know I think of WCW Red Wheelbarrow, can't help it. But then I think of that poem from the humor issue of Poetry Magazine, that is something like "so much depends upon on a white cadillac grazed with rainwater, beside the white chicks." or something of that ilk...it's good.
Love the image of the red dress against the snow. And can I just say that I cracked up reading about the "white cadillac grazed with rainwater beside the white chicks." Gotta get my hands on that issue.
But back to your poem. Loved it.
A fantastic ending (loved the use of the verb "asserts"). Cheers. ^_^
Thanks for your comments!
Gel - feel free to use it if you want, I'd be honoured!
Poet with a Day Job- thanks for the comparison with WCW - the humour poem made me smile too!
Thanks, cgp. I'm exploring other real life (off blog) writer's groups where I'm a participant not the leader...
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