Thursday, January 04, 2007


White margin

Focus in


Time kaleidoscopes

the moment asserts itself
like a red dress
against snow.


gel said...

Oh, this would be a great poem for a real time discussion group! I like the phrase time kaleidoscopes
and the last stanza is certainly strong and cinches the point.

Poet with a Day Job said...

You know I think of WCW Red Wheelbarrow, can't help it. But then I think of that poem from the humor issue of Poetry Magazine, that is something like "so much depends upon on a white cadillac grazed with rainwater, beside the white chicks." or something of that's good.

L. Monique said...

Love the image of the red dress against the snow. And can I just say that I cracked up reading about the "white cadillac grazed with rainwater beside the white chicks." Gotta get my hands on that issue.

But back to your poem. Loved it.

_Soulless_ said...

A fantastic ending (loved the use of the verb "asserts"). Cheers. ^_^

Crafty Green Poet said...

Thanks for your comments!

Gel - feel free to use it if you want, I'd be honoured!

Poet with a Day Job- thanks for the comparison with WCW - the humour poem made me smile too!

gel said...

Thanks, cgp. I'm exploring other real life (off blog) writer's groups where I'm a participant not the leader...