Wednesday, April 25, 2007

Lost

In your eyes
are the skies
and sadness
of your homeland

and the vastness
of your loneliness.



previously published in Poetry Monthly

14 comments:

Brian said...

Short but emotional.

gautami tripathy said...

Pithy and to the point.

desert rat said...

I don't know if the title is supposed to figure into the flow of the poem, but the first time I read this, I read "Lost in your eyes are the skies..."
Deep feeling expressed in just a few lines.

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

This poem really touches me deep down.

Rose

xo

daisies said...

sigh ... i felt this. wonderful.

Tammy said...

Very moving for so few words. Wonderful!

Rob Kistner said...

I like this piece Juliet. Sparse written with large scope. Nice!

Uuuuww... I like the back-black on this site. Is this your "dark side"?
:)

--and so it goes--
...Rob

Crafty Green Poet said...

Brian, Gautami- thanks!
Desert Rat - when I wrote it the title stood alone but yes I guess you can read it as a run on to the first line.
Rose - glad it touches you!
Daisies, Tammy - thanks!
Rob - Thanks, yes this is my dark side!

Pauline said...

This is one of those poems where you say, "Oh. Yes!" after reading it...

Remiman said...

Juliet,
Your right...the eyes, to someone who takes the time to notice, tell epic stories.
rel

Jone said...

So much emotion in such a small space. Wow.

sarala said...

Actually I kind of agree with Desert rat that the title and first line read as one.
Quality work.

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AscenderRisesAbove said...

lonely for home; very sad.