Wednesday, May 28, 2008

Cold

Sudden absence in his kiss
freezes her veins,
frosts her heart.

The king size bed stretches
under rumpled white sheets
like tundra.

The crystal at the window
mocks with rainbows
from a distant sun.

Tears lie cold on her cheek.



Previously published in Poetry Scotland

Absence for Totally Optional Prompts

18 comments:

Jane Doe said...

I love this poem. It is so sad but very beautiful. Though I liked every stanza, I especially love the first one.

Stan Ski said...

Strange how cold things seem when you just know something is not right.

lissa said...

you put it so well, the absence, the lost, especially the first part

paisley said...

rumpled white sheets
like tundra.

i loved this.. i felt the division of ice between two lovers,, when there is a rift of argument between them in bed... excellent!!

anthonynorth said...

Tragic is so often so beautiful - and in a way, haunting.

gautami tripathy said...

Tundra explain it all...

drifting

lissa said...

i like the dark, fairy tale feel.

polona said...

great desolate images that create a mood perfectly... ouch!

said...

Absolutely adored the 2nd stanza!

"The king size bed stretches
under rumpled white sheets
like tundra."

Great imagery. Kudos.

Scot said...

yes the third stanza is great---good sad poem--worthy of another read

gingatao said...

Oh that is very cool, icy. Very precise and controlled too.

haiku-shelf said...

I shiver.

This "Cold" means so much!

Best wishes,
Angelika

cordieb said...

How beautiful. I know of this feeling - this poem brought back a temporary flood of those emotions. Awakening to realize your love is not there - last night's argument was not a dream; the sadness of loosing a loved one is real; There is an emptiness in those feelings - but with time all voids are filled. Thanks for sharing. Peace, Light and Love, Cordieb.

S.L. Corsua (a.k.a. "Soulless") said...

The scene that the word 'tundra' elicits, and the use of such word in the scene in the second stanza -- now that's functionality in poetry. Apt and effective. ;) Cheers.

my backyard said...

I love this poem, too. The first stanza just knocked me over.

odessa said...

Sudden absence in his kiss --wow!
this opening line is absolutely stunning.

I love this poem!

Jo said...

tundra is well chosen.

gel said...

I like this poem a lot, especially the 3rd stanza.