You are a ghost in my memory
a wraith in my thoughts
a breeze in my hair
as I walk down the street
you're a floater that's not
quite blurring my vision
tinnitus that blunts
the edge of my hearing
you stalk my days
and haunt my nights
I'm not scared of ghosts
so what do i fear?
a quick scribble about ghosts for Sunday Scribblings
there are ghosts in some of my poems over on Crafty Green Poet too, you can read them by following the links below:
The Lost Dances of Cranes
Amazonia
Corstorphine Sycamore
21 comments:
Chilling!
you just scribbled this? you're a good scribbler, then.
thanks, Karen
Cool, lovely walking rhythm and the poem is flirting with meaning just as it describes, aesthetic unity, yayayay
Especially loved the image of a wraith ~ fleeting wisp-like!
I love the way you place this just out of reality - just interfering enough to be aware of.
Somehow making your ghost hover just on the fringes of your consciousness makes it more real than a full-bodied spectre we could easily see.
What popped out at me is the use of the lower case "i" in the last line. It's sort of like the self is diminished by the fear.
Great!
great poem Crafty!
Intimations of mortality? My ghosts are wraith-like too.
wow, this works wonderfully, disturingly so!
this verse really captured me in an enchanted sort of a way - the rhythm was soothing --- yet the image at the end a little unsettling - much enjoyed!!!
"
you're a floater that's not"
lovely line
I loved it!
-Mya
wonderful! you made me consider a few scenarios. Love the flow of this writing.
Hi Juliet, I have not seen you in awhile but I always think of you when I hear another new bird call.
Beautiful poem that uses very cool words to express the mystery of our fears.
Happy Sunday!
That's a very good question! Now I'm as puzzled as you are, but perhaps less haunted ;)
tinnitus is always so unnerving. You capture the uneasiness well!
Lovely, unexpected images and connections here and in your "Lost Dance of Cranes".
great work,...i absolutely love the pacing of this piece. it flows, and shakes, timidly yet powerfully moving ever forward.
This is beautiful, and thought provoking. Very nice :)
Oh, I adore this one! Would make a haunting song.
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