Thursday, January 04, 2007


White margin

Focus in


Time kaleidoscopes

the moment asserts itself
like a red dress
against snow.


Anonymous said...

Oh, this would be a great poem for a real time discussion group! I like the phrase time kaleidoscopes
and the last stanza is certainly strong and cinches the point.

Unknown said...

You know I think of WCW Red Wheelbarrow, can't help it. But then I think of that poem from the humor issue of Poetry Magazine, that is something like "so much depends upon on a white cadillac grazed with rainwater, beside the white chicks." or something of that's good.

Anonymous said...

Love the image of the red dress against the snow. And can I just say that I cracked up reading about the "white cadillac grazed with rainwater beside the white chicks." Gotta get my hands on that issue.

But back to your poem. Loved it.

S.L. Corsua said...

A fantastic ending (loved the use of the verb "asserts"). Cheers. ^_^

Crafty Green Poet said...

Thanks for your comments!

Gel - feel free to use it if you want, I'd be honoured!

Poet with a Day Job- thanks for the comparison with WCW - the humour poem made me smile too!

Anonymous said...

Thanks, cgp. I'm exploring other real life (off blog) writer's groups where I'm a participant not the leader...