Once every six months he phones,
puts the receiver down
as soon as she answers.
He just wants to know she’s still there
reckons that once every six months
a silent call won’t freak her
has no idea how much
she wants it to be him
wants him to speak
say something, anything,
and that once every six months
is just enough to break
her heart.
previously published in Curlew magazine
dialogue for Poetry Thursday
32 comments:
oh ~ an instant favourite! really poignant ...
So tragic - don't know what else to say. Really well done.
This touched a raw nerve...
A beautiful, touching poem.Loved it.
That leaves me wondering what the rest of the story is - very effective
Oh wow, been there. Not sure I like you for bringing me back so well ;-)
I'd be forced to change my number. The heart can take only so much...
Nicely done, CGP
Oh, the heartbreak! Such a familiar story for so many. Well done.
This is pretty authentic and a nice portrait of the situation.
Sometimes the words that are left unsaid are the most powerful of all.
Well done.
As others have said, I can only repeat. This was so well done and I loved the simplicity of it...
An effective piece--it got me emotionally involved in the live of the two characters. And in under 100 words. Well done.
You must know my ex-boyfriend, right? This poem is so spare, so economic in its use of words--and yet the beauty of it is that everything necessary to capture that pathos perfectly is articulated. I loved it.
Oh my...that literally brought back some memories for me. I can just FEEL the pain dripping from your words. Truly a wonderful poem...full of emotion.
Great dialogue, nondialogue. Way intelligent about the way we behave, or misbehave.
very poignant and touching piece. Thanks for sharing.
That would break my heart! Well done!
I like this.
Really, really good! I'm rooting for them to get to talk someday!!
You have a way of disturbing us with your poems, in a good way.
A universal theme of longing and restrait. Very well done.
Something about this took me aback a little. I didn't expect it to be so effective. Very nice.
A truly powerful piece. It's perfect.
Juliet,
This is so real it feels like a cut. Very well done.
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I absolutely love this one. It's perfect. I think it's interesting that they're connecting in an odd sort of way.
Me, too! Love the brevity, intensifies the punch.
I hate coming late to the party. What can I do but repeat what has already been said...loved this, poignant, powerful, paper-cut sharp. Wonderful!
Wow, seems like I've have been in that situation before. Very personal poem, short and powerful.
I wholeheartedly agree with the comments above, especially those of Pauline and Jim. (There's not much else I could add; we readers of this piece seem to be riding the same boat. ^_^)
Feels great to be back here after several months. I've been checking out past poems here (and, later, on your other blog); I've much enjoyed reading "Coming of Age."
Cheers.
Hi, I followed you from ClockworkChris. I loved this poem, it's so touching
Thank you for sharing
Joy
I am thinking she is only going to think it is sweet for a short time period; then she is going to get creeped out because it has been a year and half; then mad - change the number; he calls again. ok it is two years now; long past the time for a restraining order.
fun to read it and the comments about it.
Love this and want to jump in and tell them to speak the next time. This breaks my heart.
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